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Dashdk
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English- HELP
Posted: Oct 11, 2011, 17:36:38
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Hi i study english and we got an assignment to translate a danish text into English.

I am in dought about this part of my translation:

Can someone please help me out if this is fluent/grammar correct written english. ->




Randomly, we bought a hand weight and a bargain on some kind of cross workout machine, which was not looking promising to us – and it turned out to be the case. But that we could not note in the store, as the article was not exhibited.

the thing i am in dought abvout is "it turned out to be the case " is it english or is there an other way to it more Professionally?

yours faithfully :)

Tullsy
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Re: English- HELP
Posted: Oct 11, 2011, 18:04:25
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It's pretty good, and the section in question is actually correct - when something "turned out to be the case," that something, although surprisingly, was true. I'm a little confused, though, about the rest of your translation. In the first sentence, "we bough a hand weight and a bargain on some...," you're not buying the bargain, you're buying the workout machine at a discount, or atleast that's how I understand it.

Also, I don't think the last sentence is as it should be. "But that we could not note in the store, as the article was not exhibited." doesn't make any sense without a proper subject. I believe the "article" you're referring to in this sentence is the workout machine, so the word you're probably looking for "machine" or "item."

I think that covers it... any questions?

Dashdk
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Re: English- HELP
Posted: Oct 11, 2011, 18:07:30
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will you add

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Dashdk
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Re: English- HELP
Posted: Oct 11, 2011, 18:07:32
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tullsy can i add you on steam friends? :) will you addultimate_henkiller ASAP :)

Dashdk
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Re: English- HELP
Posted: Oct 11, 2011, 18:12:17
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Well..

decided to upload it here.. (the entire text) if anyone bothers reading it, it would be a great help..


pay attention to grammar wise correct english :)


A lottery when buying cheap fitness equipment
Guide:
There are many blanks among the cheap fitness equipment from the supermarket. A physiotherapist guides among fitness machines for use at home.
January is the height of the season for sale of training equipment for use at home.
There is not much gain amongst the machines, which the Danish magazine “Lørdagsliv” was testing.
Some of the articles we could neither see nor try before purchasing.
We were looking for machines, which according to adverts and product descriptions will cause lots of workout for the user.
Randomly, we bought a hand weight and a bargain on some kind of cross workout machine, which was not looking promising to us – and it turned out to be the case. But that we could not note in the store, as the article was not exhibited.


The equipment tested and evaluated.
When we got the equipment assembled we asked the physiotherapist and co-owner of the gym “Amagerbro Fysioterapi og Træningscenter” Peter Andersen to test and evaluate upon the equipment.
Now it is easy to think that a gym-owner would immediately slate down the phenomena of workout at home, but Peter Andersen is not about to.


>>The most important thing is to do workout. Where it is done is not decisiveRather little than not at all>Regarding conditioning workout, you need sweat on the forehead and only be able to talk in short sentences. And the strength workout needs to exhaust the muscles until they start twitching a little. After few days of rest the muscles are rebuild. It is all about pushing you all the time, because the body adapts to the challenges it is being exposed to

Tullsy
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Re: English- HELP
Posted: Oct 11, 2011, 18:39:28
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Sorry, I went out for a quick dinner and, when I came back, Steam Friends was offline (and reamins that way...). Anyways, ...

I'm not sure the title is correctly translated. A lottery is something in which you'd win a prize if your number or ticket is pulled, it can be used out of that context, but I don't think it's the right word to use here. In second sentence, I don't think that "blanks" is the right word either. It could possibly be, "there are many myths..." or something like that. "blanks" just doesn't make sense in this context.

In the line, "there is not much gain amongst the machines," "gain" isn't the word you're looking for. Perhaps you're looking for "difference" or something else, but "gain" is something additional or extra.


When you write "Peter Andersen to test and evaluate upon the equiptment," it's technically right, but the syntax isn't necessarily correct. Yes, it's true that he's performing an action on the equiptment (the evaluation of the equiptment is the action), but it's not necessary to state that outright as it is implied in English - "Peter Andersen to test and evaluate the equiptment"

Since the subject of the preceeding text was the equiptment, and the subject hasn't changed, it's assumed that the action is being performed on the equiptment.

Now, I'm pretty sure that some of your text has been cut off and I'm assuming that you use angle brackets (>) for quotes in Danish; you'd use " for quotes in English. I'm not sure what you're trying to write when you write, "The most important thing to do is to workout." Considering you're talking about working out, you're going to assume that that is the most important thing to do... Or maybe that's the point, I'm not sure ^.^ The next sentence, "where it is done is not decisive" - I think you mean, "Where it is done does not matter" - as it, "it really doesn't matter where you workout so long as you're working out." After that sentence, you'd separate the two related thoughts, "where it is done does not matter" and "rather little that not at all" (which, I believe, should be "rather, it does not matter at all."), with a comma (although this would be considered incorrect, I'm not sure if it matters or not in this case - a semi-colon would be more correct here.)

I think I covered most of it...
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